what's your url for the the DVD, and im always open to suggestions.
I personally want a job, and use the making of a short to try and keep my sanity.
I was expecting the romance thing too, the ending felt a little "thrown together." But it's better than my first short which didnt even have a narrative.
The editing both visually and sonically needs some work. Theres a lot of unsettling jumps. I think this film could have been 10 minutes long and still told your story. You might try sticking in a few more close ups-the framing becomes a bit predictable. You've got a great camera-get the best out of it.
Oh and well done.
hi there,
For what its worth i didnt like it at all.
I agree with miker that it doesnt seem to have any point, or hook to pull you in.
I turned it off after a few minutes, as I found it really very uninteresting storywise, and I think thats what counts.
I didnt think it had much feeling, or 'soul'.
Technically it is excellent and I take my hat of to you and your patience at getting it made and finished. The editing is a little odd, and your choice of shots seemed inconsistent, but I kind of liked that quirkyness.
Ignore my opinions, simply well done on finishing it, and best of luck with the next.
<font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">WOW so a few mins' so you gave it a chance. it's 20mins long and you watch the first couple of mins. so how can you even comment. about the whole thing.I turned it off after a few minutes, as I found it really very uninteresting storywise, and I think thats what counts.
sounds like you spent more time typing your comment than watching.
Overall I liked the film, on the understanding that I knew it was your first (if that makes any sense). Also I think Counterstrike is a great game so I am biased.
I agree that people should at least watch the whole thing before making a constructive comment but that's by the by.
To be honest, I also agree with the others who mentioned the eratic cuts, some which were not needed and some shots (only in my opinion) were poorly/ lazily framed. I would also say that the actors could have done with alot more direction.
I really like the bit near the end were you cross faded between him and the game character.
As I said though, overall I think it's a great 1st effort smee and well done for sticking at it. [img]graemlins/thumbs_up.gif[/img]
On a different note, is it just me or do most people's first films have guns in them?
mine doesnt :b
my first short has computer in it which uses vegetables as capacitors for storing human matter and spirit.
You ask for opinions so I gave mine.
Its perfectly valid. I didnt consider it interesting enough to keep watching. Thats my critique. Sorry for being so blunt.
As I said its well made, but too much "adoration of tech" for me Im afraid. Live with it.
My first short didnt have a gun in it, it had a goblin being punched out by a young girl in a white dress, and it had a bunch of flowers and a pair of sunglasses.
My first short had a ninja girl, jaffa cakes, banjos, business men in african tribal masks, blocks of cheese, pickachu, brazilian goal celebrations, brad pitt, a television called Eullyses, a crazy girl in a bin, people talking into chilli peppers, cosmetic surgery-but no guns.
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